One time I decided to play hide and seek with my 4 friends. I was the seeker and started counting up to 10. The last person I found had the BEST hiding spot! Which was underneath my sister's bed! One of my friends called Aaira started to count next, so I thought it was funny to hide underneath the bed where Taanvi was hiding. Once I heard Aaira count to 10 I got really nervous. I saw Aaira walk past the bed as I giggled. But because of that, she was able to find me first. “Haha! Found you!” said Aaira
“Aw man!!” I said back. I tried getting out of the bed but when I tried I couldn’t!! “DAD!! HELP ME I CAN’T GET OUT OF MY BED!” I yelled. Dad walked in the room looking angry.
“Angeleen, how many times have I told you NOT to go under the bed!?”
“I don't know!? It's like the best spot in the house, where else would I hide?”
“Whatever. Next time this happens I'm not going to be lifting up the bed.” Dad lifted the bottom right corner of the bed very high, so that way I could get out.
“Thanks dad! Anyways, that won’t happen again.
I love your story. It has a great beginning, middle and end. I like the way you explain how the game was going before you got stuck. Great use of dialogue. A very satisfactory ending.
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